Rejectee Therapy for Space Daryl
Started by Jake Dunnington on Jul 26, 2013
  • Guys,

    I really appreciate you taking your time to watch this and give feedback . Thank you so much!

    Working on something else now!

    Jul 31, 2013 at 10:12pm
  • Matt Hill says:
    What Mike said. I dug the aesthetic but the story took too long to get going. The girl is just there and never paid off. Also the villain's acting took me out of it, he wasn't bad, he just didn't seem to fit the tone. But focus on a clear linear story. Maybe make a second episode and use that as a pilot. Because it felt like we spent the whole time leading up a guy cruising for adventure. Just start with him cruising for adventure.
    Jul 30, 2013 at 11:57am
  • Jake,

    This was good and pretty funny. But for me, the show doesn't really start until around the 2 minute mark. Don't spend those first minutes explaining who/what/where, just jump into the action and let us catch up. The crash stuff was funny and that's where we need to start.

    Jul 28, 2013 at 2:14pm
  • http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fCEg4GvQOGw&feature=youtu.be

    Worked pretty hard on that one. Would love some feedback!

    Jake
    Jul 26, 2013 at 9:39am
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