Rejectee Therapy for No Man's Land
Started by Jess Lane on Feb 01, 2013
  • I'd echo what Dave said. The problem with a large concept show is it becomes hard for the audience to track what's going on in a world alien to them. When trouble arises (aka the plot begins) they don't know how it translates. Lemme give you two examples to illustrate:

    1) In a dystopian future, a character is starving to death. Word reaches them there's food in 'the forbidden zone'.

    2) In the dystopian future, several characters are arrested for not taking their happy medicine. The judge sentences them to twenty quazarks of community service in the place that produces the happy medicine they hate.

    Now both of these are interesting concepts. But in the first instance, I know exactly where the plot is headed. It's easier to make as a show. Consequently, it's easier fitting jokes and references in because we've wrapped our heads around what the problem is these characters face. So all things considered, it helps to lighten the plot load your show is carrying.

    Just my two cents. Nice work by the way!
    Feb 11, 2013 at 7:17pm
  • Jess Lane says:
    Thanks for the feedback Dave! This all makes a lot of sense and I can see where it's coming from.

    I'm definitely working on more stuff in 2013! Woop.
    Feb 11, 2013 at 6:24pm
  • Hey! This was real fun! Channel 101 needs more Jess Lane and it's a bummer that this didn't get in.

    Awesome soundtrack. Cool shooting.

    I think on another month this would've probably screened. It didn't make it into the screening probably because it was a little too complicated and the jokes didn't all connect. For me the concept was pretty dense, and all the jokes linked into that imagined universe - future jokes, amplified progressive gender equality laws jokes. It didn't feel like everything was landing.

    But I dunno! It was really fun! It was close. You know how to make shows!
    Feb 11, 2013 at 12:49pm
  • Jess Lane says:
    Hey guys, definitely wanted to get some feedback on my pilot No Man's Land. Here's a link: http://youtu.be/Uv9A5DbRfAM
    Feb 01, 2013 at 1:15am
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