Rejectee Therapy for Feedback on 'Imaginary Friends': https://drive.google.com/file/d/16D4_BhK630ZdzZVv3auMFOBaQs
Started by Tom Hockney on Oct 24, 2019
  • Hi Tom!
    Sorry for the late response.
    So, I think the issue here is mainly that the jokes weren't really landing on panel. The pacing of the editing is also a bit strange at moments, which can also really make a difference in how jokes play.
    When it comes to story, it felt like the plot was constantly shifting. It seemed like the mannequin was going to be the focus of the episode, then the focus shifted to Tomato Jones in the last couple minutes. You could maybe get away with something like this if the transitions were cleaner, but I'd probably recommend trying to focus on one simple, clean arc and getting those jokes to play.
    That said, I agree with Clayton. Really hope you keep submitting.
    Nov 05, 2019 at 11:23pm
  • There's some potential here. Although I did not quite understand the ending I wanna inspire you to make more stuff. Can't wait to see what you come up with next.
    Oct 24, 2019 at 10:20pm
  • Url is too long, my bad. Here it is short.
    https://tinyurl.com/y36qq57c
    Oct 24, 2019 at 9:33am
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