Rejectee Therapy for Feedback for 'MOINPO' https://vimeo.com/362328385
Started by Thomas Wood on Sep 26, 2019
  • Well, that was a nightmare… MOIN-FRIENDS!! We’re sooo sorry for having neglected you for so long!! In truth, we have been bumbling and stumbling in our efforts to complete the pilot for this nasty, little show ‘MOINPO’ and it’s finally complete!! Sort of …

    Anyway, we’re so overjoyed to show you the first episode. Please follow the link (below) in whichever presentational format you most desire.

    YouTube: https://youtu.be/cR5HrJq0_uA

    Vimeo: https://vimeo.com/375884712

    (as of 27/11/2019 we have been informed that some aspects of our video violates the automated restrictions in Vimeo.com’s content policy. We are currently attempting to argue against these claims in order to make the video viewable to the public again)

    MOINPO.com: https://www.moinpo.com/series-1

    (pretty much links to YouTube and Vimeo but it adds a little traffic to our website)

    LIKE / SHARE / SUBSCRIBE your little hearts out, if you choose to do so … We hope you enjoi XX
    Nov 28, 2019 at 1:17am
  • Sorry. The 'N' key on my keyboard isn't working. Have to copy 'n' paste the bugger. That's why I mispelled my own name and other typos.

    Aaro Sage writig.
    Nov 25, 2019 at 9:59pm
  • Hey-hey, half a 'MOINPO' creator here!!

    Got to say cheers to all who provided feedback (Alex and Matt). Your comments are spot on and I only wish that we were aware of the flaws of the pilot before we submitted. Difficult to read at times but encouraging...

    As Channel 101 has rejected poor, little 'MOINPO' we have since decided to act as if they didn't and release a monthly episode on YouTube... I know, I know... We're probably burying the show but seems like a fun, challenging thing to do and we've been sitting on it for so long that it may just generate a bit more effectiveness in our storytelling.

    If we may, we'd like to credit those who took the time to watch a review 'MOINPO' (Alex and Matt) and have added your names to our, admittedly considerable 'SPECIAL THANKS' accreditions at the end of the new ad improved 'MOINPO' coming soon!!

    We also wonder if it would be possible to quote your comments on our TESTIMONIALS board on the MOINPO.com website?? I know they weren't glowing recommendations but we feel it's good to show our failures as well as our triumphs, if there are any triumphs to be had.

    Aaro Sage writing.
    Nov 25, 2019 at 9:55pm
  • Matt Hill says:
    Basically everything I said in the other rejectee thread applies here.
    There are some cool stuff here, the animation and voice work is great.
    Story/jokes need work. Combine this animation style with a solid story and some great jokes and you'll have something.
    One other thing, no one likes watching credits. I'd keep them under 10 seconds. I get the impulse to credit people who worked on it and you should, but just keep it short.
    Sep 30, 2019 at 8:35pm
  • As requested, just watched and here's some thoughts.

    First off, according to the comment below and seeing the website link at the end of the pilot, this is something you haven't made specifically FOR channel 101? That's generally frowned upon. I'd say dig into the series that exist on the site and try to come up with something specifically for 101. But nevertheless, here's my feedback on this as a pilot:

    Doesn't really feel like a show. You got a Moinpo character that you tell me is funny but doesn't do anything funny and a narrator that sort of tortures Moinpo but also not in a particularly funny way. There isn't a story. He wakes him up with a bucket and then asks him to pick a breakfast and then the end. Also, it's three minutes long but a full minute of it is either opening or closing credits. C'mon.

    For your next show, keep it simple but slightly more complicated than this. Start with a character, give them a goal, put obstacles in their way, resolve it. Beginning, middle, end.

    Good luck on your next thing!
    Sep 28, 2019 at 1:01am
  • Oh!!

    Password for video: breakfast
    Sep 26, 2019 at 10:56am
  • * pared down - after a Google spellcheck
    Sep 26, 2019 at 10:54am
  • Went out for a celebratory martini last night and scribbled down a few thoughts...

    "Finally sent a very peared down version of 'MOINPO' to Channel 101. Most intense process of editing / sleep deprivation / coffee abuse / chain-smoking / self-induced starvation that I've ever gone through and really appreciated the experience! Feel like we sent a stinker but feel... Good..? To have tried..?"

    Aaron Sage writing.
    Sep 26, 2019 at 10:53am
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