Rejectee Therapy for Feedback for NOT TV
Started by James McGrath on Aug 29, 2019
  • I liked this. Please keep making stuff and submitting.
    Aug 31, 2019 at 3:25am
  • Hey. I'm a fellow reject. Here's my two cents:

    This thread is titled "Not TV" but your video is titled "Chappio Motivational Threat SystemĒ. They should match. And where does the name Chappio come from? It sounds like that robot movie with Die Antwoord. Surely there is a better name for this concept. And how does a Motivational Threat System work? Who makes it? Who buys it? How much does it cost? Iím intrigued but confused by your title and this extends to the whole video.

    It feels like an infomercial. But it lacks black and white footage, announcers, phone numbers to call, etc. (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2xZp-GLMMJ0).
    Or is it a parody of Motivational Speakers? Then go that route with a guy with a microphone and power point and the others are giving testimonials.
    It seems like a parody of one of the two but I don't know which.

    And I wish I could see the Motivational Threats. We see a guy on the phone with a black eye and the words Threat in Progress and the girl with PTSD. But what I wanted was to see someone try to do something, get distracted and then goons appear and beat the shit out of them. Then they stand with a bloody nose, go back to writing and say "Thanks Chappio!" That would help show the concept instead of characters telling us about it.

    But your pilot is funny! It made me laugh! It has an insane energy to it. The performances and tone are great. So next time, come up with another crazy idea, clearly explain it to the audience step by step, keep the same energy and you have a hit. Better luck to us both!
    Aug 30, 2019 at 2:07am
  • https://youtu.be/36VBndyzyb8
    Aug 29, 2019 at 5:09pm
  • Any other feedback hugely appreciated
    Aug 29, 2019 at 5:08pm
  • Looks like I forgot to make the title a thing people clearly understand.
    Aug 29, 2019 at 5:08pm
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