Rejectee Therapy for Feedback for “The Dead Wife Tapes”
Started by Jay Feder on Jul 25, 2019
  • KP Parker says:
    Hi Jay! I totally agree with what Matt said. Really interesting idea just needed a little more momentum. The stakes START with a murder and then it drops off a bit while watching 5 similar tapes. I'd love to see what the episode would look like if he sees her hand within the first two minutes instead of waiting until the end. Also would love to hear more about her and their relationship! Photos, memories, etc!
    Jul 26, 2019 at 6:57pm
  • Matt Hill says:
    This one was definitely in contention.
    I like how you used black and white in combination with the VHS format to make a basic apartment visually interesting. The "hello, work" joke is also excellent.
    Ultimately the story never really gets going. It just needs to progress more. We get the wife's hand and then the address (the audio on that is low), and that's basically all the info.
    It's a fun idea tho. Would have like to see the main character get a clue from the video, investigate, watch more videos, investigate more, etc. Give him some action, get him out of the house, make it more dynamic.
    Definitely enjoyed this one and would love to watch what you guys make next. Thank you for submitting!
    Jul 25, 2019 at 9:32pm
  • Jay Feder says:
    Hey Panel,

    We are curious why we were rejected this month and would appreciate feedback:

    https://youtu.be/uWVTjeIkCAs

    Thanks,

    Jay and John
    Jul 25, 2019 at 9:28am
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