Rejectee Therapy for Fuckboy
Started by Edwin Li on Apr 24, 2019
  • Hey, Edwin!

    I think it's hard to follow what the main character wants. Does he want the girl from the beginning? The one from the date? Or at the end are we finding out that he doesn't want to be a fuckboy anymore, and if that's the case then maybe get there sooner so we can see him trying to achieve what he wants, if that makes sense.

    Other than that I thought it was a solid submission. Keep submitting, man!
    May 07, 2019 at 1:47am
  • Edwin Li says:
    Any objective criticism would be helpful thanks!
    Apr 24, 2019 at 7:43pm
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