Rejectee Therapy for Feedback for "Boris"
Started by John Nelson on Mar 28, 2019
  • I'd say so. If you found some way to end on him being put up as the flag, that probably always gets a laugh, and seems like a good conclusive spot to close out. I don't know if you'd be able to do that and get the second dog on tv bit in (and you know how I feel about that bit, slammin').
    I would just say if you do keep the last scene in, it should be very clear that the storm knocked him off and he touched the ground. I'm pretty sure that's what happened, but it wasn't extremely clear, and that along with Boris having another idea are probably the reasons why the ending didn't feel clean.
    Apr 02, 2019 at 3:26pm
  • Thanks for your feedback, Chase! Another person we showed it to said something similar about the ending.

    We're wondering if we were to cut the last bit about Boris having another idea, if you think it'd be worth resubmitting next month?

    Thanks again.
    Mar 30, 2019 at 11:42pm
  • Hi John!
    I liked this submission. There were some good jokes (I personally really liked the guy petting the dog on tv, that was slammin'), and the guy being put up as a flag played well at the panel.
    For me, what this was lacking was a solid and conclusive ending. I think you could potentially get away with a cliffhanger ending in a channel101 pilot, but probably not with something as innately mysterious and unexplained as Boris was. The last 15 seconds left me pretty confused about the whole episode.
    Again, this was a solid submission. Hope you keep making pilots!
    -Chase
    Mar 29, 2019 at 4:44pm
  • Rejected this month, we would very much appreciate any feedback:

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aEDKscc31Vg

    Thanks!
    Mar 28, 2019 at 7:50am
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