Rejectee Therapy for Feedback/Therapy for pilot of "Duck Prison"
Started by Stoph Demetriou on Oct 25, 2018
  • Alex Kavutskiy says:
    Hey, thanks for submitting!

    The animation is fun and you clearly have a grasp on how to tell a story. I can't speak for the rest of the panel but, for me, the comedy didn't land at all. I don't believe any comedy is off-limits but if you're going to make rape jokes -- prison rape included -- the punchline shouldn't just be "ha ha he still gets raped".

    Keep making stuff and submitting!
    Oct 27, 2018 at 8:05pm
  • Stoph Demetriou says:
    Not really. How can I improve?
    Oct 25, 2018 at 6:28pm
  • Stoph Demetriou says:
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Wzn9d7F4jCE&feature=youtu.be


    Be gentle.
    Oct 25, 2018 at 6:28pm
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