Rejectee Therapy for Finding Wakanda Feedback
Started by Daniel Becker on Jul 26, 2018
  • Yo,

    I think there's some fun stuff in here and there's definitely a lot of the makings of a full, fun story -- you got a main character with an impossible goal, he pursues it with a plan, it doesn't go his way, but then he ends up getting something at the end anyway.

    However, a lot of these elements just didn't all come together for me. Like I didn't understand why he needed a black friend to get to Wakanda (I haven't seen Black Panther) and I didn't really understand the political references or how they fit in, and none of the jokes particularly hit hard for me.
    Jul 27, 2018 at 8:17am
    Jul 27, 2018 at 5:19am
  • This was shrunken down from 9 minutes. Any thoughts would be nice.
    Jul 26, 2018 at 4:18pm
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