Rejectee Therapy for Beam Me Up - Pilot
Started by Eric Rogers on May 24, 2018
  • Animation is hard work, and I think you accomplish a lot for this pilot (as well as your last entry- Robo Goes to College).

    Story-wise, Chutt's just an absurd character- so his journey here feels arbitrary. It's a little hard for me to rally behind him as the protagonist- and that made me check out early.

    Technically, I think a little more polish would help. I think a quicker pace would help sell the comedy a bit better- plus maybe some light music could help bridge it all together.

    Great job 5 minutes isn't easy to animate- can't wait for the next one.

    May 25, 2018 at 9:11am
  • Hey dude!

    I think one thing that would help is try to make the dialogue flow a bit better. It really kills the momentum when there is a large pause between characters talking.

    Try to make them go back and forth and feel snappy, keep our attention the whole time. I think you had our attention up until the 1:00 mark, and it slowly drags.

    Just needs some tightening, and funnier lines is all.
    May 24, 2018 at 4:55pm

    Just wanted some feedback for my pilot here to improve for next time!
    May 24, 2018 at 3:37pm
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