Rejectee Therapy for Next Time
Started by kiyong kim on Sep 30, 2012
  • thanks for all the excellent notes kyle!
    Oct 02, 2012 at 9:07am
  • Hello. I was on the September Prime Time Panel and though I can't speak for everybody I'm happy to give you my thoughts.

    We considered this pilot, and if my memory is correct we even watched it twice. You have a leg up on a lot of other submissions because you've got three distinct actors/characters, your shooting geography makes sense for the most part and we can hear/understand what you're saying. Seriously. We watch a lot of crap. Those three elements get you, like, halfway there.

    My #1 suggestion would be to get out of your apartment. This is a trick I wish I had learned a lot sooner at 101. Look at this month's five Prime Time shows: they were shot almost entirely outside (except in cases of pretty cool interiors like a classroom or warehouse). This isn't a coincidence. This is because 1. the outdoors are not nearly as boring to look at as your house/apartment/garage/whatever and 2. it takes about 1% of the effort to light outside. If you really want to blow people's minds, go out there at dawn or dusk when the light isn't directly overhead and the shadows are longer. You can make stuff look great without owning a single light.

    My other suggestion would be to make your story as simple as possible. This is something else I wish I had learned sooner. I've watched (and made) a ton of crap at 101. Even though your instincts tell you to be as clever and complicated as possible, the best stuff makes it easy for the audience. In fact, try watching your show with the sound off. If your story still tracks with no audio you're doing something right since you should be showing and not telling anyway. I think your idea was clever but unless you're really executing it's just convoluted.

    The craft of editing/shooting/directing is something that can take awhile to get better at (it did for me anyway) so make the other stuff easy for now. Go outside and make a simple 1-2-3 story. You'll find that not only is it easier, but the audience will enjoy it a lot more.
    Oct 01, 2012 at 9:26pm
  • any notes on our rejected pilot would be much appreciated!

    https://vimeo.com/50251898
    Sep 30, 2012 at 9:49pm
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