Rejectee Therapy for I need some opinions on my work
Started by Sergio Ramirex on Nov 22, 2017
  • Hi Sergio,

    This is an imaginative pilot, not like one I've ever seen, but I think the biggest thing here is the audience has no character to follow. You have an out-there sensibility which lends itself to creativity, so I implore you to look at Dan Harmon's story circle. I believe if you put whatever idea you have within the confines of the story circles structure anything you make will be much improved. Here's the article about the Story Circle:

    http://channel101.wikia.com/wiki/Story_Structure_101:_Super_Basic_Shit
    Jan 15, 2018 at 9:38pm
  • I acknowledge the flaws in this short, but i wanna compare and contrast with the ones someone else can spot. So, if you give it a watch, i'd apreciate your critic. Thx ~:

    https://vimeo.com/236354029
    Nov 22, 2017 at 4:25am
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