on Mar 25, 2016
Hello, Tony! I must agree, this IS a bit sketchy. Iíd rather address a few technical issues that are getting in the way first, though, and by far the most noticeable one to me is the sound. Thereís a lot of white noise smothering the dialogue, and the discomfort that comes with listening to the hiss of white noise for any amount of time makes it pretty difficult to enjoy anything underneath it. If youíre not using an external microphone, Iíd suggest you look into one of those, and always put some time into sound mixing while you're editing.
Also, visually, there are only two static shots in this episode that you cut back and forth between, which is a much less interesting experience than we could be having. This is a visual medium, so itís a good idea to mix things up a bit - even if what youíre shooting is essentially people talking, think about things like where their eyes are going (i love me some inserts!), or what the placement of the camera (the audience's eye) suggests about their characters, and how maybe you can play with that over time to eventually suggest something else.
And now I'll talk about story: story is what keeps an audience watching. If your show is called Bad Therapist, and the only real story beat is "therapist is revealed to be a bad therapist," you're playing a pretty weak hand, and there's a lot more you could've explored in five minutes. Send that bad therapist on a journey, man!
Still, I liked this submission, and Iíd really like for you to keep making things. So, please do that, and Iíll look forward to hopefully seeing more from you!
Mar 28, 2016 at 11:30pm
I recognize now that I submitted more of a sketch. Any feedback would be helpful though.
Mar 25, 2016 at 4:47pm
You have to log in to comment. If you aren't registered yet,
© Channel 101. All rights reserved.