LA SLACKER CONFIDENTIAL
on Mar 23, 2016
Hi Daniel! I was on the panel this month, and we watched a lot of pilots. Yours was enjoyable, but I think your description of it as "episodic" is fairly apt, though perhaps not in the way you're thinking. I think that a pilot, on its own, should not be episodic. It should, in some way, be a complete story. My memory can be spotty (this is why it's helpful to include a link to the pilot) but I remember thinking your pilot felt more like a collection of moments than a story. Even if those moments are funny, it's hard to sustain interest without a story arc taking us from one moment to the next. Any audience is just going to start glancing at its phone as soon as it gets the feeling that the characters they're watching aren't going anywhere in particular, and that's exactly the feeling that comes with watching a character do a series of funny things rather than watching that character navigate a story in which funny things happen. I'd recommend that you get into story structure and keep writing and making things (you only get better by working more) - just keep in mind that, when you have 5 minutes to fill, it's a good idea to have a story mapped out that you can then hang all the jokes onto. Thank you for submitting!
Mar 25, 2016 at 7:30am
Any feedback would be great; my guess is that it doesn't feel particularly belonging to channel 101; however, it is quite episodic, and has legs, right?
Mar 23, 2016 at 6:28pm
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