Rejectee Therapy for Carjacker for Jesus (take 2)
Started by Adam Strange on Mar 30, 2015
  • Don't resubmit. Make something new. Sometimes resubmitting works but for the most part the panel hates seeing things over and over again.
    May 31, 2015 at 3:22pm
  • Thanks for the feedback. Is it okay to submit it again and try my luck with future PTP? Last month was a great one with some steep (and much loved) competition.
    Apr 07, 2015 at 12:19pm
  • Hey Adam! I'm having trouble coming up with feedback for this one. I think this is a case where you did a lot of things right, but it just didn't connect or add up for whatever reason.

    I don't think the erratic editing worked in your favor - I don't think those loud editing jokes worked...

    But I think moreso I watched this and felt at a distance from the characters the entire time. Maybe it's the static shot choices and low dialogue mix? I never felt like I was WITH your characters. If you watch the five current prime time shows you feel right alongside those characters the whole time... two of them have a lot to do with voice over helping quite a bit. With Kill The Baby, Natasha, Senior Flowers, Stupid Bitch, and King of YouTube I really feel pulled along through the story by the main characters and that's a strong reason for the audience to vote for them and want to see more.

    Something to consider. Maybe someone else can chime in with some more worthwhile feedback, haha.
    Apr 06, 2015 at 11:27am
  • Any feedback?

    https://vimeo.com/121746900
    p: jackers
    Mar 30, 2015 at 9:00pm
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